Em if they can handle themselvesRoland is the love interest I think when ou have it that Values and Professional Knowledge in Teacher Education you can t tell if a love interest is in the room it deserves a comment like this is god level writing He s a knight who lies and cheats but he has real skills and talent Hikari is a martial artist who wants a sword and by god she s going to get it even if it means fighting the whole schoolThere are butou get the idea These guys all have their own little uirks attitude and way of speaking that makes them all stand out and I love it Like Terra clicked with me than any other heroine since Angelfall in an actual oh this is totally me way not oh this is a blank sheet way Seriously my personality is like 75% Terra except that I m actually smart and funny and single guys hit me upYeaaaahh this is Maberan s reviews of course there s negatives duh Just like this book has pretty uniue positives it has pretty uniue negativesOK so Terra kept saying what the reader should ve understanding from her actions and words I don t know if that has a name but an example is Terra always getting back up No matter how many times people berate her or kick her she s always getting back on her feet That s actually something I love in MCs and I was glad to finally see a female protagonist like thatBut then there s literally a scene where a character is like I guess being good at this is Searching for Wanda your talent uh and Terra deadass turns to the camera and says no my only talent is never knowing when to give up Like we can t tell LIKE DUDE You re the TWA guy You should knowou don t just SAY what Ray Ryan you want the readers to think about a character You let the character be themselves and have the readers understand them through their actions and words asou did with Terra until this fucking scene There s also the same thing with Terra being like a rock which is actually shown from the start and then suddenly Daddys Sweet Girl: A Dark Stepfamily Love Story you get this horrible chapter in the middle of the story about her backstory and it Gave Me Vietnam flashbacks I DID NOT NEED TO SEE THATEdit I saw a review where the reader said it was very weird how emotionless Terra was and that he enjoyed this chapter for the backstory and it s weird because that s literally what happened in my childhood Terra suppressed her emotions just like I did because people were picking on her for being different and the adults did nothing Reading that chapter was just painful because I saw all my old caretakers and it made me see red This kind of thing really puts characters and writing into perspective doesn t itAlso there were these subversion of expectations that I could see ten miles from here and it s really weird because it s like these random little moments during training Like Terra fails a test or something maybe gets called out by a teacher or Roland comes by to berate her then comes his turn and Terra s like oh finally Roland will be getting some and then gasp he succeedsLike I m very confused as to how obvious these all managed to be Because this isn t hard But they all failed And I am left bemusedAnd then there s the whole Nazi thing So Terra mets this Hanns guy from 1940 and he s all we are ze best and she s like dude nazis are the worst thing ever and they meet uite a few times and I thought it was this really cool red thread with how enemies perceive each other and the difference between a hero and a villain and whenou can tell which one The Last True Explorer you re which Like Terra grows each time she meets Hanns and that relationship she has with him fits with the goal that pushed to join the legion and the doubts the Captain raised in her about the Aeon Legion being no better than any other armyBut then it just putters out Like instead of showing him the things the Nazis have done will do or give him dates and try to understand his point of view she s just dude hitler is evilou are disgusting how can ou not see that and he obviously shrugs her accusations off as propagandaLike I could do a better job than that She just insults him and expects that to change his mindflashback to a video by JdGtalking about a live action show of the ninja turtles with a 5th turtle with the power to turn people good with one call outJdG Bc I mean ou don t need the turtles You save the world with that power5th turtle figurine You re evil It s not good to be evilHitlerKen doll Oh my Shneider I see it now diesend flashbackLol But erm let s get back to the book So Location, Location, Damnation (The Brackenford Cycle yeah at first I though that Terra would make a parallel between her and Hanns and the Captain and the Aeon Legion but nope She just keeps on being thick headed and refuses to see Hanns side to try and connect with him and open him up to her own side of things Likeou do know that a big part of the German population didn t know about the atrocities they committed right Would Thrones, Dominations you hate them too Hanns is no better than that andou could make him see what s about to happen and at least try to make him stop trying to time travel but nopeIs it because he s a Nazi I don t think so because the author does portray him in a better light than the SS or other members of the party I think it s because that s going to happen in the seuel is there one lol I don t know I just want logicAnd I mean Terra is also pretty uh what s the word like a dude says he s Muslim and she s immediately like I m not wearing a burua bro and he s like wat and she s like omg I Hela Cnau you re Muslim andou actually respect women LIKE DUDE WOW I thought I was little bit too hateful of the good old Allahu Akbar but that s just made me feel a lot better about myself geez And there s all this bullshit with Roland just like waiting and observing people fail a test so he can learn from their mistakes and somehow that makes him the worst person ever Oh and there s also a part where she s told that her friends went ahead of her because if they hadn t they would ve been dead and she also sees that as a major betrayal like dude they were firing rockets at them geezAnd there s also this test they go through where they view spoilerget captured and tortured by their own people and it s treated as this big how could ou but THERE S LITERALLY NO DESCRIPTION OF IT It s just they tortured them and Terra being mad Like I hadn t even registered until I read another review that this would ve totally affected them but it had so little impact on anything that I just didn t get it hide spoiler I put this book down at around 53%What I LikedFirst I have to give regards to Beaubien s YouTube account Terrible Writing Advice which I greatly enjoy He clearly understands the pitfalls of various ubiuitous fiction tropes especially those in YA novels and it shows I didn t roll my eyes at a love triangle nor was I thrown out of the world by any obvious plotholesThe novel s greatest strength is in its premise Beaubien successfully made a world where knights Nazis martial artists "and other historical heroes and villains could interact with each other which I found fascinating Imagine say if Roman gladiators "other historical heroes and villains could interact with each other which I found fascinating Imagine say if Roman gladiators made a futuristic Colisseum on a level of Saturn City or a debate scene with Greek scholars pitted against Tibetan monks I also liked the idea of his protagonist and to a lesser extent his other charactersWhat I Didn t Likebut beyond their initial impressions they didn t have much depth This could ve been Warning This review contains spoilersRight off the bat I just want to say I really enjoyed reading this bookI liked the main character and her transformationcharacter development throughout the book was well executed I was very impressed and honestly uite enthralled by the world building The author managed to portray time travel as a real practical science and eternal outh as a plausible and attainable possibility The rules of both are pretty clear cut but don t seem trivial or arbitrary The entire city and Legion are meticulously planned with an attention to detail that reminds me of George R R Martin but thankfully this book didn t introduce as many characters as he doesThe pacing for most of the novel was also good though to be honest I got bored during the interval between the battle at the library in the beginning and Alya coming to recruit Terra at her uarry I know this part is meant to show what Terra s life is like in her home continuum and just how average and mundane her life is but it bored me nontheless The story really picked up for me when the Tirones training started The tasks they were meant to perform were well described and exciting and I found the idea of being able to replicate any kind of terrain weather buildings and even people using salients a very captivating concept The Academy teachers were cool too esp Nikias and sometimes it was like they were just messing with the recruits for fun I found the part where Nikias and co try to ambush Terra in the Academy after her meeting with Lycus uite funnyNow let s come to the vill wait Are they really villains Hanns and Kairos They themsleves don t think so at all Hanns believes he is doing a service for his country while Kairos thinks mindbogglingly that entire worlds need to be ended along with thousands if not millions of lives to save Time itself Both seem to be doing things not for personal gain but what they truly perceive to be the greater good This is another theme that is interwoven through the whole story Who are heroes and villains really Are they just born that way or do they become like that over time How do Jace's Pet you knowou ve become a villain or hero The story doesn t really give us a clear answer but encourages us to form our own opinion on the matter as Alya does with TerraComing to the writing style I have to say that I overall enjoy Beaubien s writing though I wish he would include a bit of the thoughts and feelings of the protagonist But I do think I understand why he refrained from doing that see section on Terra Mason There were a few typos and grammatical mistakes that I noticed and found #Slightly Annoying But What Bothered Me Than This Was The #annoying but what bothered me than this was the of contractions in the dialogue The dialogues seemed like they were from a movie script and not coming from the mouths of actual peopleTerra MasonTerra s main ualities are STUBBORN or dete. D charming a genius inventor of a time travel machine and a dedicated member of the Nazi Party Yet he cannot understand why people from the future regard him and his fellow Nazis as monsters Now he must use his charisma and cunning to challenge the seemingly invincible Aeon Legion and its monopoly on time travel He will not uit Hanns will steal history itself if he has to mistakenly believing it will prove him to be a her. Site of chivalrous The Japanese woman does not care about honor The Muslim does not care about Terra s hair showing and is very tolerant of others However there is not really all that much to them I think this theme should have been broadened to the cliche don t judge a book by its cover At least with that a interesting character could have been crafted instead of just a negative of a racial archetypeThe third thing I want to talk about is the second most important character in the book the antagonist Put simply I am mostly disappointing in him The author calls him a Nazi however that is a dubious claim Many times in the book Hannes rejects key aspects of the Nazi ideology such as the hate of Jews racial supremacy and many others Essentially Hannes is a German nationalist He wants Germany to win the Second World War not Nazi Germany What I dislike about this is that it waters down the character In the first paragraph The Mistake (Off-Campus, you are hit with an astounding event Nazis invade a library in the 21st century However this is really just in name only In a move that I can understand and respect the author does not go about including actual Nazism in the book or at the very least makes sure any Nazi ideology is understood to be false and bad The author tries hard to make us sympathize with Hannes to make us understand his motivation However I believe that the author tries too hard to make Hannes not so bad Is he a Nazi Yes but he doesn t believe in any of that nasty stuff like eugenics Is he at odds against Terra Yes but he is very polite and a gentleman Is he involved with one of the worst regimes in history Yes but he isn t evil he is just misguided One of the things I hate the most about Hannes is that he is made out to be one of the most bright scientists ever capable of pulling amazing feats of ingenuity and a REAL scientist However when he is faced with the concept that the Nazis are seen as evil or that they lose the second world war he just can t accept or understand it He merely rejects any notion of it Not to be a gatekeeper but I feel that an actual scientist would be curious at this and investigate it not just brush it off When a scientist finds something that goes against what he knows he seeks it out and explores it not reject itAnother point about Hannes is that I feel that he is underused The synopsis makes Hannes out to be the main villain the main antagonist in the book However I feel that he isn t Terra faces many challenges and all of them are much harder than Hannes Hannes is not the main villain he is just a side show that serves in moving the plot along near the end of the book I feel that there is a lot than could have been done with himTo end this bit of ranting I got into I just want to say again how amazing the book is What I talked about were I think minor flaws the bits of dust in an almost perfect gem It is clear from the onset that the author put an epic amount of thought and care into this book and the entire setting From the moment I read it I did nothing but read until I was finished I would most definitely recommend this book to anyone just keep in mind that it is angled towardsoung adults I found out about this author and book through his YouTube channel of bad writing advice which unlike the name suggests is good writing advice Lots of sarcasm and wit making fun of standard tropes in many different genres though typically YA What attracted me most about this book was the synposis and the twist of the third paragaph Typically ou ll see the monoamorous couples described with each having their own paragraph but no he s a Nazi he s her enemy and that s hilarious Although the synopsis is a bit misleading as at no point does Hanns ever try proving Nazis were heroes nor was he all that confused about people referring to him as a monster He just a normal Nazi who thought what he was doing was just and that Germany should winPerhaps I inadvertantly led myself to have higher than usual expectations but the book is rathernot good It just feels a bit awkward since I feel the uality of his videos is so high it s a bit of a surprise to see this book written as it isIt starts off in a library with our heroine Terra coming face to face with the Nazi antagonist of the book Hanns The awkward wording kind of threw me off It gets going immediately which was a little jarring but otherwise would ve been okay if it wasn t so telly instead of showyI thought perhaps only this first initial scene would ve been like that which would ve been rather interesting to see play out We get told the action and find out the characters perspectives on it later But no this trend persists the entirety of the book It s 100% telling and not showing That s one of the biggest and most well known trope of bad writing of all I m just shocked that the author had this problemIt s frustrating in general to read a book that tells ou everything without showing but it feels all the frustrating coming from someone who gives out writing advice and good advice at thatSo much happens to our main character but we never get any sort of real reaction from her There is a sentence or a couple words here and there but nothing that feels impactful emotional #Genuine Or LastingShe S #or lastingShe s by Silverwind a protector of time with a job offer of monumental proportions guarding time itself And how does she react Barely at all Perhaps a little shocked confused but other than that I have no idea I m not even told thatShe ends up accepting the offer of course and I was curious to see how the author would handle the parents ButI am a bit confused Terra literally tells her parents what she s doing and we never see their reaction They were apparently okay with it and she sends them an update after she leaves on her ventures then later comes home at the end like it s no big deal and her parents are just chill with it I know it s a little detail and YAs are NOTORIOUS for dropping the parents but this was such adrop Just a weird way to go about itThe main character in general is mind boggling ignorant and plain stupid She s always shocked of every new piece of information she hears regardless if it should come at a surprise any It s like she doesn t have the ability to remember things or logically deduce thingsTerra Blinked A thousand ears You re that oldVita sighed Why do they always find that surprisingTerra knew the Saturnians were older than they appeared but she had no idea they were that oldYou were literally told that those people were immortal and ou re just as shocked every time ou hear someone s ageTerra just looked confusedTerra raised an eyebrow I m confusedLiterally one sentence in between separates thatMost of the descriptions in this book stem from the environment or the appearances of people As an example the character Lycus We re introduced with him mostly being in shadow glaring eyes and when he smiles that wolf like grin as we re reminded every time he smiles which is often it creeps Terra out But why Just what was it that made him so immediately scary to her We re told she s afraid of him and that she tries her best to avoid him but we re never told why *What is her thought process behind her fear What aspects of him what sort of presence does he give *is her thought process behind her fear What aspects of him what sort of presence does he give that s so frightening We re constantly told he s scary and intimidating without actually seeing him do anything scary or intimdating view spoilerAt least not until a bit later but that doesn t excuse the nagging reminders of it earlier with nothing to back them up or explain them I did enjoy the concept of his three faces though each with their own name and personality but it bothered me to have so many characters mis naming him while he was in his Lycus face form whateveryoucallit hide spoiler Aeon Legion Labyrinth is an enjoyable read I found it to have very compelling world building with great depth and history It is a fantastic mixture of Harry Potter and Divergent from how it feltmoved not from the setting The characters were interesting and the premise of the book drew me in The style prose can be clunky at times but I got used to it by the end Be forewarned that there are some spelling and punctuation issues but if that kind of thing doesn t bother ou too much it isn t a big deal A few of the characters come off feeling one dimensional Terra s the main character parents are the worst in that regard Their reactions and personality are flat and they feel like throw aways to me With that being said I found the rest of the book to be great The cast develops well and are believable The plot takes a bit to get moving but once it does it hits hard I found the book to be an innovative take on difficult tropes time travel and coming of age This book was written by the Terrible Writing Advice guy on Youtube After reading this book I can say that he followed his own advice up to the part where the plot is neededI ll give ou a brief blurb Terra attacks time travelling Nazis and becomes a famous time knight s suire Then uh Terra goes to school and there are Nazis What are the stakes Terra doesn t become a soldier and a Nazi might discover his country s horrid crimes which honestly sounds awesome by the way ALTHOUGH I did enjoy the school The pacing was brisk and the shit happening was interesting and they had the best fucking teacher and I love himSo what are we left with The world and the characters And to be honest those were well done Sure the description of Saturn city was lacking and I understood nothing of its geography but the technology history and wars the Legion s numerous enemies did build a pretty complete image BUT where this book really shines is with its characters I can honest to God say that ou have never seen and won t be seeing these characters again Soon anyway It doesn t mean that they re great or three dimensional characters by any means but they are uniue enough for it to be notedMC Terra Mason is a bored girl who wants a goal worthy of her attention She s enduring blunt and down to earth but not enough to think that heroes can t exist and that doing the right thing doesn t matter She ll help people in need but leave th. Bborn streak Her persistence and bravery gains the notice and sponsorship of one of the Aeon Legion's greatest heroines Now Terra must turn that stubbornness into determination if she is to contend with history's finest soldiers and somehow pass the Aeon Legion's final test the mysterious Labyrinth She will not uit Terra will prove that even someone as average as her can still be a heroineHanns Speer is polite good nature. .
The author has given such great writing advice on outube that I ll have to see how it translates to his actual work This book is entertaining enough and has some interesting ideas The author has a great sense of humor and a good grasp on how to play around with tropes to mess with our expectations The writing is a little on the amateurish side which is perfectly understandable and forgivable for an author s first published work I believe it was self published but I could be wrong It does seem to be a lot better edited than the average self published book All in all I really enjoyed it Is it the best book I ve ever read Nope Is it the worst Nope Was it fun entertaining and memorable Yeah I think that it was Also to any perspective writers out there I highly recommend that A Streetcar Named Desire. By Nicola Onyett (Philip Allan Literature Guide you check out this author soutube series Terrible Writing Advice where he gives some very valuable writing advice in a pretty humorous manner This book was forced all of it Over the top clumsy obvious Examples The whole heroism as a concept theme Don t get me wrong it is a great debate but the book itself was in the end too black and white to be the appropriate ground to pose it The book wants to be so philosophical but in the end there are clear good and bad guys at least that is what it is intended Terra wants to be a hero and the Academy trains heros and it bothers me to no end I know it is part of the discussion but it seems that heroism is a job ou can train for by following some steps rather than a collection of traits and decisions as envisioned from a particular perspective whichever those might be The thematically appropriate names and the allegedly timeless Saturn City which is actually heavily based on ancient Greece and Rome Like come on Terra Mason is a girl that likes stones and is strong and resilient as one Lycus Cerberus has a grin like a wolf I wonder if their parents could see their future and named them accordingly Nikias Orion Prometheus all characters from Greek mythohistory Endymion s symbol is a moon ARRRGH breathe Not to mention all the positions in the army consul cohort leggionaire centurion are ripped right from Rome The fights were like a fcking videogame In fact all the book was Am I the only one who noticed Everything happens in stages the enemies and weapons have a number of abilities and very specific limits and there is always a precise way to escape the situation The fact that most of the book focused on the training with little time left to forge relationships and delve in the subplots did not help I didn t believe Terra s feelings positive or negative for other people and the subplots seemed to come out of nowhere with very little previous work Terra leaving and returning home It was very weird First she tells them I m joining the time police and apparently they take it as normal and when she returns they act as if she had gone away for a couple of days to a regular training course The way Delphia is treated is similar She appears early to provide an introduction to the city and then briefly returns in the end to say hi One would think Terra would make the effort of keeping in touch with her since she was so nice to her Oh and her backstory also came out of nowhere and wanted to explain something that really didn t need all that much of an explanationOverall despite all of the above I liked the worldbuilding a lot It shows that it is very well thougt out and I found it uite original I loved the character of Lycus What can I say I have a sweet spot for those Roland and Delphia also made my day I could even empathise with Hanns and his fight with his superior s blind faith in false science Us science people understand each other Terra s character development although heavy handed was very well done I disliked her at the beginning for being so spoiled and whining but I ended up liking what she represented So will I read the following installment It is very likelyThanks for reading Plot 45Charcterisation 25 Great characters but JP doesn t show their character enough so that when there are supposed to be emotional moments or punches they don t hit hard enoughWorldbuilding 455 Incredible original world with many cool new ish conceptsThe Mason on the end of her name annoyed meYet I think the author has potential and might improve so I plan to read Best new series I have read in a while Thanks for the new read JP and keep it up I found this book not long after stumbling across the author s YouTube Channel To put my opinion of the book in one sentence it s One of my favorites I have read many of the other reviews here on goodreads so I am going to try and focus on things that I didn t see from the other review that I want to talk aboutThe most odd thing I found about this book is what audience it is going for For background I am a sopho in college at the moment What I find most strange is that the book cannot seem to pinpoint a target age group In many ways I can see this novel being for a oung adult audience maybe 8th grade to 11th or so Many of the main themes it deals with seem to be around that area ideas on growing up becoming independent overcoming struggle finding inner motivation etc All of these are good themes and I think they are definitely done well The main #Character Being Nothing Than A #being nothing than a modern girl who just graduated high school highlights this In truth her character is so bland and 0 dimensional in the beginning that it is very easy for anyone to put themselves in her shoes However it does not take all that long for some odd topics to come up The first that struck me is when the main character Terra is being introduced to the grand Saturn City and all of its wonders She meets a friend and shortly after that friend s mother
The Mother Introduces Terra To A Series Of Drugs Thatmother introduces Terra to a series of drugs that denizens of Saturn City use One of these makes sex amazing This comes to me out of nowhere and seemed jarring for the relatively normal tone of the book For me to include the topic of aphrodisiacs is pretty advanced something that I could see a book targeted for people around 18 After reading this I mentally adjusted Ok I thought the diction and overall language may be a bit low but the topics are going to be advanced And The Women Of Apollo yet they never do I know there is a running joke about love triangles for the author and his fanbase but that does not limit the author from making any romantic references I say this because I feel that if he is going to include lore on the sexual activities of the denizens of Saturn City it makes sense that at least some aspect of the story might include something similar Instead this aphrodisiac is rather just dropping into the story It is a bit of a shock but nothing The second and perhaps most strange thing for me is the inclusion of the word bully many many times Perhaps for Terra aged at around 18 it makes some sense for her to say this However when the mean gruff and near psychopathic Lycus to say something along the lines of I have no room for BULLIES in MY school it really made me cringe A person who is aged I believe over a thousandears saying bully just doesn t make sense For me that word is only used around middle school The Escape (Hendersons Boys, younger and maybe the early half of high school not a person with a thousandears under his beltThese two things together in the same book is what I am confused about On one hand the advanced topic of aphrodisiacs are discussed but any other reference to love or sex is never again mentioned Then not long after there is several instances of the word bully as if the book is a PSA in middle school My most pressing advice for the author would be to define his target audience and write to that end I have no issue with advanced topics being covered in books for middle and high schoolers I read book series like Gregor the Overlander which had no issue covering many dark and twisted things Yet in Gregor the Overlander these topics did not seem dropped in The fear of death and suffering are common and pressing concerns in the series with many threats around every dark corner However in Aeon Legion that is mostly a dry motivational tale of becoming something from nothing a single comment on sex is just strange Another thing I wish to talk about is the main character Terra I will try not to spoil too much focusing mostly on the beginning of the book most of which is available as a sample Primarily as mentioned before Terra seems even flatter than 1 dimensional to start with This is so bad that ou could switch her gender with nearly zero impact on the book an aspect that does not change later on Honestly the most severe impact of Terra being female is that she is not as strong or tall as other characters something that does not have to be specific to a female character This is furthered in her lack of interest of any character The normal interactions between boy and girl just do not appear with Terra She does not have any interest in any person and neither does any person seem to have interest in her Although it is fine to not deal with romance hints at it even so small as a tiny comment like he looks cute would be cliche but it would at least flesh out her gender a bit Am I saying all female characters need to have relationships or act overtly feminine No However a strong aspect of Terra s character is that she is a relatively normal girlAnother aspect of Terra that seems to be lacking is her overall personality I would say that in general Terra seems to react to most things in a predictable and almost boring way Something time based Weird and unimaginable This is made worse by her strangely ignorant comments When she sees a character she immediately assumes that they must be like how she imagines Knight Must be chivalrous Japanese Must be honorable Muslim Oh my gosh You are going to make be cover my hair To me it was much to obvious that her acting in such ways was an easy way to develop the theme that ou can t judge a person based on their appearance or nationality etc The theme itself I find to be a tad simple And with most characters there is only one single twist to them Small spoilers The knight is crafty and the oppo. Time travel has made the Edge of Time a dangerous place To protect the Edge of Time from the disastrous alterations of time travelers the Aeon Legion seeks the greatest soldiers and warriors from the most bloody war torn eras in history Those they deem worthy gain a chance to compete in the toughest training program ever designedTerra Mason a plain eighteen ear old girl from the modern United States has an impressive stu.